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Never land
Chapter one
It was a sunny day when I had to pack my bag and go on the bus.
I sat down, I went from home to the airport and went on a plane and flew from Christchurch to Never land .
Chapter two
I was finely there, it looked old and wreaked there were alien bird people. Then I heard a wispier I diffident now were it was coming. from and the voice went again and again. I followed the voice and it was coming from the forest I looked and the person told me her name it was Willow and she asked what my name was and I told her it was Butterfly Butterscotch. and I asked where we were and she. said we were in Never land I got scared cause she. said never land. She said it was the end because she said whoever is on Never land will get sucked in to a portal and go to a different land. in ten seconds I took my last breath it smelled like fresh air. and then I got sucked in …….
Hello Mereana.WOW!What a great story.I like the sequence in which you have written your story and I like how at the end,you have left the reader hanging.You have used some great describing words.I did notice there were a couple of places were you could of used some punctuation.Overall though, good job.I look forward to reading more of your posts.
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